Comments on: 3:15 Experiment Poem: August 15, 2008

By: bibliomom

bibliomom — Wed, 03 Dec 2008 04:32:49 +0000

I have a hard time commenting on poetry. I feel poetry and I have a difficult time expressing those feelings but I enjoy your poetry that I’ve fallen upon quite a bit. Thank you.

By: gautami tripathy

gautami tripathy — Thu, 13 Nov 2008 04:14:53 +0000

So alive and so vivid. Loved it! blank page soaked

By: busby seo test

busby seo test — Tue, 11 Nov 2008 03:00:25 +0000

It was so great Poem with an art picture.

By: artpredator

artpredator — Tue, 11 Nov 2008 01:22:04 +0000

Thank you Linda!

There is always a temptation with 3:15am poems to edit, to fuss with them. But the only editing I do is choosing whether to put them out in public or not! There can be truth in an unscrubbed ragamuffin…and certainly I learned years ago doing the experiment that I’d rather sleep than edit at 315am!

By: Linda Jacobs

Linda Jacobs — Tue, 11 Nov 2008 00:39:56 +0000

I love how you connect the two events. The poem reads so effortlessly. Really beautiful!

By: artpredator

artpredator — Mon, 10 Nov 2008 22:17:54 +0000

Thanks, Paul! Glad the narrative direction makes sense and brings the reader into the experience directly. I have done the experiment when I was working way too much and commuting! The only year I bailed was when I was breastfeeding and working part time–could not wake up that many times in the night!

Thank you Richard–that’s very high praise to me since I find WC Williams such the master of making statements of life full of grace yet so simple and direct and with so much going on at the same time.

By: Richard

Richard — Mon, 10 Nov 2008 22:12:52 +0000

That’s a wonderful, and touching poem, that comes alive in the details. “No ideas but in things.” WC Williams would have approved.

By: Paul

Paul — Mon, 10 Nov 2008 21:35:33 +0000

That is a really cogent 3:15 am poem. Narrative poetry is so hard to do well and you have got the timeline perfect so that reading poem is like experiencing the event at 3:15 am, the storm feels very real in the background and so do the characters. The tenderness of their relationship is subtly and cleverly evoked. I like the different approach to the experiment you have taken here, more lucid less dreamlike. One year when I’m not working I must try this.