spring poem

2008 March 17

Winter i1832765104_d99c408f3e_o1.jpgs almost over; spring arrives this week! Here’s a spring poem for the Poetry Train, my choice partly inspired by Rhian’s fiery passionate piece. It’s supposed to be 3 stanzas of 5 lines with approx 10 syllables each but I don’t know how to format/blog that yet! Help! (hey, I figured it out! 4/2/08) The poem also needs a title…suggestions, please! This poem also kinda works some for the personification tree prompt from readwritepoem..well it’s personification of a pinyon-juniper desert ecosystem!

my desire a desert drought, dessicated:
you rouse me with gentle, nourishing rain
drops gather on pinyon, shiny globes of
wholeness collect, taste of you and me
nourish flax, forget-me-nots flourish

i learn to absorb occasional flash floods:
outbursts of poetry, temper, resistance
thunder lightening of your fear pain fury
raises my protective spines, scares birds from song
hail dashes, shreds blossoms that couldn’t close

thunderstorms spend energy, move on:
my sweet wet scent lives on with your moisture
my colors saturated rich with your sweat
recall the pungency of our passion
watch this desert bloom, wait for next rain to fall

14 Responses leave one →
  1. 2008 March 17

    Passionately sensuous images!

    I loved this!

    numbing nirvana

  2. 2008 March 17

    lovely imagery

  3. 2008 March 17

    The more I read it the more I like it. I loved the imagery.

  4. 2008 March 17

    I really love these lines:

    ‘raises my protective spines, scares birds from song
    hail dashes, shreds blossoms that couldn’t close’

    What a great image.

  5. 2008 March 17

    sensual…images of love not eco-systems..superb..

  6. 2008 March 17

    thanks, everyone! since it’s about a long ago time in my life, and not part of the 315 experiment and never got in ARTLIFE Limited Editions, I don’t think of this one much in terms of readings. nce to resurrect it, revise it and get positive feedback!

  7. 2008 March 17

    Thanks for coming back. :)

    I like the visual stimuli combined with the scents of ozone and sage.

    Rose

    xo

  8. 2008 March 18

    very delicious imagery…a very human quality given….

  9. 2008 March 18

    Awesome poem, wonderful imagery.

  10. 2008 March 18

    Very rich and fullsome poem, full of energy and emotion

  11. 2008 March 19

    Cool, I might steal this one for a writing exercise! ;-)

    “desert recollection”
    “recalling the desert”

    I have trouble titling other people’s poetry. Sometimes I just close my eyes and point to a random line and THAT’s the title.

    I did that with yours twice and came up with
    “saturated” and “flourish”

    I also like titles with double meanings.

  12. 2008 March 19

    thanks everyone!

    how will you use this DD as a writing exercise? (you’re welcome to it of course!) prompts in quotes?

    hmmn i think maybe saturated as that’s more of what happened..took a long time to flourish after that thunderstorm!

  13. 2008 March 19

    very vivid and sensual

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